I think it needs more of a reminder in the beginning about what the DNC hack was and why it was significant, otherwise it might go right over a lot of people's heads.
It's good - the voice is firm but easy to listen to, it has a call to action, but doesn't tell people how to do it. (202-224-3121) You want to reach people like my wife who knows little about this.
These are the questions you want to answer in story form:
What is the DNC hack? What happened?
Why is it important? Why is it important to me?
Why should I care?
What do I do about it?
That's tough in 30 seconds. But I'm willing to chip in if you can kick it up a notch.
Will people know how to spell “undeadFOIA” when they hear it?
I think it needs more of a reminder in the beginning about what the DNC hack was and why it was significant, otherwise it might go right over a lot of people's heads.
~ use the word blame instead of attribution? ~
It's good - the voice is firm but easy to listen to, it has a call to action, but doesn't tell people how to do it. (202-224-3121) You want to reach people like my wife who knows little about this.
These are the questions you want to answer in story form:
What is the DNC hack? What happened?
Why is it important? Why is it important to me?
Why should I care?
What do I do about it?
That's tough in 30 seconds. But I'm willing to chip in if you can kick it up a notch.